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Young people are committing more crimes. Discuss the causes and solutions for this problem.

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Nowadays, committing crimes has been the heat phenomenon among different ranges of age. Extradionaryly, there is a significant growth in the number of young citizens who have committed crimes. There are some reasons that could explain that case and solutions to decrease
this
 problem will be presented in my essay.
First
 and foremost, family is a crucial reason for the phenomenon of rejuvenation crime. Specifically, due to the life-spaced, and development of technological advances and social
media
 platforms,
parents
 have tended to work overtime more frequently and consumed more of their free time on social
media
 mass.
As a result
, the relationship between
parents
 and their children has been weakening which might make the youngsters more impressable and lead to committing unlawful actions.
In addition
, the restriction in terms of users' age and inappropriate
content
 on social
media
 sites has been an important reason in creating holes for the questionable and violent
content
 that could target and reach teenagers. These methods that should approach the
parents
 and
media
 mass could be the necessary steps in order to drop the young crime proportion. Importantly, the
parents
 should spend significant time educating and accompanying their children in order to avoid away from illegal behaviour. Respecting the youth's privacy, discussing daily together, and putting them under certain control could be good examples.
Furthermore
, the government and
media
 films should take responsibility partially for
this
 phenomenon. Specifically, in terms of authorities, the laws that could standardize and ban inappropriate
content
 on
media
 mass should be enacted.
Additionally
, private films should be community-mined in control and create
content
 for young customers. In conclusion, three objects that affect sharply to the youngsters
such
 as school,
parents
, and society have been playing vital roles in improving
this
 circumstance.
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