In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing What do you think are the caises of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience?

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In
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modern era, all over the world
people
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suffer from obesity because they follow an unhealthier diet and
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in some part country
people
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do not go for physical exercise. Here, I would give some reasons for
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problem and
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write a solution to the problem.
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with, the major one is all
people
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have nowadays a lot of choices to select foods despite in the past
people
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did not have
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community attract many unhealthy products after watching advertisements on the television and social media.
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,many children opted for unhealthy junk food in their childhood days
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they suffer from
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disease.
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, many workaholics do not go for some exercise after and before their work period so they are all addicted to
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lifestyle.
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, if I talk about a particular field
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in banks public does not use their physical fitness and all the working hours they only work from sitting.
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,
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is a global headache so not only individuals but
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the administrator
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in solving
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issue because if more nation will suffer from
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kind of problem
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the economy of the state
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goes down.
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, in school
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all students should learn all drawbacks of overeating and not doing some physical activities so in the
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they awake and
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teach the upcoming genre to overcome
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issue. In conclusion,
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particular dispute not only affects the well-develop city but
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affects the developing side morely so
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is the main reason for
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complication and solutions.
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