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With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. Some people think that it is a good speed forward, while others do not. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Although
 the increase in the use of
e-
books
 alongside a decline in paper
books
 is thought by some to be a positive development, other people do not agree with
this
 view. In my opinion, replacing paper
books
 with
e-
books
 can bring about more advantages compared to any disadvantages it might cause. Admittedly, there are some basic drawbacks to using
e-
books
. One problem when these
books
 are used is that reading them regularly may damage the eyesight. More precisely, the readers` eyes are exposed to a constant supply of light while reading these
books
, leading to the gradual deterioration of the vision. Another drawback is that the gadgets to read digital
books
 may contain some potential distractions.
For instance
, if one studies an online textbook on their
smarphones
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smartphones
 for a crucial exam, any message or notification coming from social media can easily distract their attention.
Nevertheless
, despite the disadvantages above, I believe that significant benefits could be gained through the use of digital
books
. One of them is related to their mobile feature.
The contemporary
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 technological advances have
enable
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 people to download a large number of
books
 into small devices, some of which can even be carried in a pocket. As a consequence, students or book lovers no longer need to carry
heavy
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 paper
book
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 while
traveling
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 or commuting.
Secondly
, using
e-
books
 is advantageous because they are eco-friendly as opposed to conventional ones.
In other words
, their production does not require to fell trees, which filter the atmosphere by emitting Oxygen and absorbing Carbon Dioxide.
Hence
, the widespread use of
e-
books
 would decrease the levels of deforestation, making a positive contribution to air quality. In conclusion, even though
e-
books
 may damage the eyesight and concentration of readers, the benefits in terms of mobility and environment far outweigh these minor disadvantages. I
also
 believe that these drawbacks can be minimized if readers took necessary precautions
such
 as wearing glasses or disconnecting the Internet when reading
e-
books
.
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