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The best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is believed that the key factor to solving issues related to the environment is to raise the
price
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 of gas. From my perspective, I partly agree with
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 statement, as I argue that there are other effective solutions to
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 problem. There are several reasons why people might believe increasing the
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 of
fuel
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 is the best
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 for solving environmental issues.
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 is mainly because raising the costs
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fuel
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 decreases the number of vehicles on the road significantly.
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carbon dioxide emission, which is the main contributor to global warming, might
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 decline.
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,
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 could be the best solution to air pollution, potentially saving the habitats of human
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 and other species in the future.
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, developing countries like Vietnam have implemented
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method
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 in order to reduce air pollution.
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 decreased the usage of vehicles significantly, helping to improve the air quality effectively. Despite the above arguments, I still believe that raising the
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 of
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 is not the best
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, and there are many other effective solutions to environmental-related problems. The main reason for
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 is because there are way many other environmental problems that can not be solved by simply increasing the
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, the explosion of
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 is one of the major concerns nowadays, mainly contributing to global warming being at an alarming rate.
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 can not be solved by raising the
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price
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 alone.
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, more effective measures need to be taken to tackle
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 problem. children should be educated about family planning at a younger age, and population growth should be integrated into lectures in colleges.
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, people might have
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 full awareness of family planning in their later lives, when they are married. In conclusion, while raising the
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 of
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 could be a good
method
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 to solve some environmental problems, it is not the best.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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