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In some places old valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Different
societies
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 place importance on different age groups. In some cultures, older
people
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 are highly respected for their wisdom and experience,
while
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 in others,
youth
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 is valued for its energy and potential. Both perspectives have merit, but I believe a balanced view that appreciates the strengths of both groups is best. In many traditional
societies
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, the elderly are regarded as the custodians of knowledge and cultural values. Their long life experience enables them to provide guidance in decision-making, family matters, and community leadership.
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, in many Asian and African cultures, elders are often consulted on issues ranging from marriage to conflict resolution. Respecting older
people
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also
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 helps maintain social stability and a sense of continuity between generations.
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, some modern
societies
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 place greater emphasis on
youth
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. Younger
people
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 are often seen as innovative, adaptable, and better equipped to deal with rapid technological and social changes. In industries
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 as technology, media, and fashion, the ideas and creativity of
youth
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 are often more highly valued than the experience of older generations.
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, prioritising young
people
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 can drive progress and economic growth, as they represent the future workforce and leadership. In my opinion, it is unwise to value one group over the other. A society that ignores its elders risks losing cultural heritage and wisdom,
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 one that overlooks its
youth
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 may fail to innovate and adapt. The most successful
societies
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 are those that respect the contributions of older
people
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also
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 empowering the younger generation to shape the future.

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task response
Add one more clear reason for your view and give a concrete example to back it up. This will make the answer stronger.
language use
Keep sentences short. Some lines are long. Short lines are easier to read.
coherence
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Use link words to move from one idea to the next.
content
Clear view that shows both sides and a fair end.
content
Good choice of example about elders and youth.
language
Easy to read with simple, straight language.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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