A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research

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human ethics so excessive
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while others believe they are an integral part of biodiversity evolution as being hunted by
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, exploiting
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hunting quadruples as herbivores
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strict control could lead them to diminish meanwhile all terrestrials have the right of living whereas being hunted by nature
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defend animal rights while applying patch tests in laboratories on them in order to provide healthy food sources for people or products cosmetics with
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side effects. In conclusion,
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animals
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opponents who believe
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in food pyramid or scientific trials should be banned totally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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