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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinio

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It is argued by a number of states that financial improvement is the most necessary target for them, while some other communities feel that other developments are essential as same as monetary.
However
, I agree with the
second
 statement and
this
 essay will discuss not only these statements but
also
 justify my point of view. On the one hand, a nation is mostly dependent on its economy, and a stable pecuniary can keep its country strong.
Moreover
, the government can meet up the needs of every civic as well as they can be able to do every possible progressive thing in their country if they are economically strong.
For instance
, they can improve transportation systems by constructing more and more flyovers, over-bridges, metro rail, and so on with their fund.
On the other hand
,
although
 a nation's development is more dependent on economic progress, it can't be denied more other things
such
 as improving educational systems as students are the backbone of a nation, developing health services, civil services etc are
also
 very important. Because a kingdom can't go far away if its internal parts would not strong.
For example
, if citizens don't get proper treatment, proper education, or proper protection in their homeland,
then
 how can a homey called progress?
Furthermore
, if we notice the developed country like USA, UK, Canada, and Switzerland, we see that they are developed in all their sectors.
In addition
, if a state can produce good doctors, engineers, teachers, and technologists, it will be strong by earning taxes from them. In conclusion, in spite of noticing only the financial sectors for processing, I think, the government should focus on every possible sector which can help them to reach their destination.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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