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People today shop, work and communicate with others via the Internet instead of face-to-face communication. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, most
people
’s lives have a profound effect on technology. One of the effects is communication via the
internet
, no matter shopping, working or connecting. In my view, positive development surpasses negative one. On the one hand, there are two of the main positive reasons that
people
 use the
internet
 to communicate with others.
First
, for shopping,
people
 may have more choices of what they want to pursue on the
internet
.
In other words
, they don’t need to visit the stores or shops, it helps them to save time.
Also
, they can easily compare the price of objects or products
that is
 cheaper or not.
Second
, for working or communication, during the COVID-pandemic,
people
 can work from home (meeting) on the
internet
 as well as communicate with friends via Facebook or Line efficiently avoid the virus infection.
On the other hand
, some sociologists proposed the research that
people
 living in virtual
life
 who does not have contact with reality (or so-called face-to-face social activities) may cause some negative effects,
such
 as some health problem, particularly mental issues.
Furthermore
, during the COVID-pandemic, some studies
also
 confirmed
people
 who do not have face-to-face communication
also
 estrange their relationships with their friends or co-workers. To be specific, there is more social news that
people
 with worse relationships with their family members or friends cannot maintain their emotions or behaviour in daily
life
. In conclusion,
although
 there are some disadvantages of using the
internet
 in different fields of our
life
, the positive development outweighs the negative development due to the pioneering technology which brings our
life
 a bright future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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