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Young people who commit crimes should be treated the same as adults by the authorities. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is often argued that young
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 should receive the same type of punishment as adults,
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 their role of crimes. In my opinion, I partly agree with
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 idea. On the one hand, nowadays it is an increase in criminal cases, most of them are young teenagers. The lack of suitable punishment policies for the youth is the main reason for responding to
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 problem.
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, countries in North America oftentimes send criminal children to special education centres where instructors will be provided to educate the young
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 about their mistakes in a given period,
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 release them back to social life.
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 results in more negative impacts on the community because the simpler punishment they have received; the higher chance they make the same mistake again.
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, teenagers' mental will definitely not develop as mature so it is unfair if they have received the same punishments for certain crimes.
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 and foremost, their awareness of right and wrong actions is not developed as adults so it is impossible for them to not make mistakes.
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, their control of emotions is not good as adults so they oftentimes have a fight with their friends in school and even in the social community. Generally,
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 of punishing them the same as matures by government policies, the well-educated should be given to teenagers since they were a child by parent and their surroundings. In conclusion, the government should consider how to punish criminal young
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 based on the different circumstances in order to create a fair and safe environment.
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,
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 should definitely put more attention to educating their children to avoid negative situations.
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