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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

#people #choices
Nowadays, modernization has changed human life entirely. In
this
 day and age, some people claim that we have endless
choices
 in many fields.
Although
 we have a wide range of
choices
, I believed that we still have limited
choices
 in some cases. It is undeniable fact that the new century brings varied
choices
 for everything. It means that there is no limit to our needs in comparison to the past. take foods and
fruits
,
for
example
, we bring imported foods or
fruits
 to our living places by aero planes which takes just a few hours to receive.
As a result
, we are no longer limited to choosing seasonal
fruits
 of our region.
In addition
, technology pushes the boundaries of our selection.
This
 is because, by a click, we face an overwhelming number of
choices
.
For instance
, online shopping has prepared a new platform, which offers customers to choose between a wide variety of
choices
.
Although
 we have the opportunity to select from too many
choices
, we still have some occasions in which, limited options should be selected.
On the other hand
, in some cases, humans still make decisions based on limited
choices
.
For
example
, majoring in a university or a high school should be started by choosing a subject, and there will be limited items to choose from.
Furthermore
, facing too many
choices
 needs a large amount of money. unless we are loaded, we will be offered different
choices
. Consider
traveling
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travelling
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 as an
example
, if we cannot afford an
airplane
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aeroplane
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 or a train ticket, we will have only a chance to travel by car. Overall,
although
 some people think that, humans have never-ending
choices
 in some instances
such
 as foods or
fruits
 or access to an unlimited number of products, I consider that we still deal with choosing a limited choice,
for
example
 when it comes to
decide
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deciding
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 for selecting a major at university.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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