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Today people can work and live anywhere they want, because of the improvements in communicant technology and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #work #improvements #communicant #technology #transport #development
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this
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people
 can work and live a comfortable and happy life anywhere they like due to the improvement
of
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 communication and
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modern
technology
although
 it can be used in
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 ways which can harm
the
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society
. I hereby support
the
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this
 view and illustrate my remarks promptly. Whilst, Communication and
transport
 had greatly advanced the human being can work and contact
people
 while they are staying anywhere.
Further
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more
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lets
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 take an example, working in
call
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center
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 a person can be
in
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different
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 continent
still
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and still
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 work
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foe
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 a company
that is
 not situated in his country and still get paid and live suitable life. When it comes to
transport
, the use of advanced cars with high speed allows
people
 to get there destination on points and do
there
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 jobs effectively and efficiently. The cons aspect for the
society
 is that the use of new
technology
 has led to
commitment
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 of crimes like robbery and conducting
miscelenous
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miscellaneous
 activities. When it comes to
transport
 it has greatly led to pollution of the environment with
carbom
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carbon
 mono-oxide exhaustion which has
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affected
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effected
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affected
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 the
society
 which respiratory illnesses like asthma and others.
In addition
 due to high speeding and recklessness driving
transport
 system led to many accidents and
death
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 of many innocent
people
.
Likewise
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 the use of modern communicant
technology
 and
transport
 gives greater opportunity to mankind than its side effects which can be revised by the government and institutions. I conclude that modern communicant
technology
 and
transport
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 beneficial to
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society
 at large and should be used as expected.
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