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Nowadays many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Where to
work
 and how has been of great concern to many individuals.
People
 are torn between working for the government or a private firm and working for themselves. Now, a lot of
people
 are interested in being self-employed because they want to be able to balance their job and social life. The downside to
this
 is that it is really stressful and very risky as one can lose everything in a snap of a finger. The reason why
people
 do not like to
work
 for companies or organizations is that a lot of companies operate with a nine hours working system
thus
 working from 8am to 5pm and
also
 on weekends.
This
 is because of the competitive nature of businesses now. A lot of
people
 are not satisfied with
this
 because there's actually little or no time for other important activities.
People
then
 tend to open their own businesses which allows them to
work
 whenever they want to. The danger in being self-employed is that one can lose everything he or she has toiled for easily. Theft and fire outbreaks are common among entrepreneurs. Another thing is the stress being self-employed comes with.
People
 treat their businesses like their babies. They
work
 tirelessly and expect results because it is their only source of income.
For example
, YouTubers
work
 very hard to create content and after, monitor how their videos are doing; whether
people
 are watching, liking etc. It's sometimes very frustrating. In conclusion,
people
 choose to be self-employed to
work
 for another person because they want to be able to have a social life aside from
work
.
However
, working by one's self is stressful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • freedom
  • pursue
  • passion
  • interest
  • income
  • financial success
  • control
  • working hours
  • work-life balance
  • empowerment
  • ownership
  • job security
  • stability
  • financial challenges
  • isolation
  • social interaction
  • self-discipline
  • motivation
  • deadlines
  • supervisors
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