Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyles in the countryside. other believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. discuss both view and give your opinion.

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recent days, many
people
believe that
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in
countryside
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can helps to have a healthy
lifestyles
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.
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, there
still
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an arguing which to get a healthy
lifestyles
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it
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easier if
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in cities due to the facilities. In my opinion,
although
the amenities are limited in suburbs, actually it gives
alot
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a lot
of benefits to support our health condition.
Firstly
, cities are the places where we can find tons of facilities,
such
as gyms, fields, parks,
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centres and
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a lot
lot
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a lot
option
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of restaurants.
Moreover
, almost most of all the
manufactures
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and the
expedition
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are running in cities due to
more
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accessible.
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, the basic purpose of
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people
are
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to love with pleasure, that's why when
people
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being
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supported by many options, there is a tendency that the
people
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pleasure without
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about the impact in
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later life. For
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instace
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,
people
will
love
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eat
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junk food
junkfood
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junk food
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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