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In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, owning an increasing number of older
people
 has put heavy pressure on public finances,
therefore
, the community ought to pay for medical treatments to tackle
this
 problem on their own in the future. From my perspective, I strongly agree with
this
 idea and will give several reasons in
this
 essay. On the one hand, it is not fair some certain groups of
people
.
For instance
, there are more and more
people
 who live in poverty in every
nation
. They can barely pay their own household bills. It means how they are affordable to pay for their own treatments when they even can not pay for their own daily-basic needs. To illustrate, a recent survey has shown that there is a significantly increasing number of
people
 suffering from epidemic disease. It can happen simply because they do not have enough money so they choose to surrender to faith.
Furthermore
, it will affect the
nation
's
health
 rate and lessen their wealth.
On the other hand
, there is healthcare accompanied by modern technologies. The
people
 have to pay their medical expenses, as the authority cannot afford both
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 hospitals and
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 the duty of individuals.
Additionally
, they can implement a few schemas for reducing the cost of particular medical emergencies.
For example
, there is a
health
 scheme which does help
people
 to manage their budget and get good facilities.
Moreover
, as
people
 are growing in large numbers of societies is investing money in different healthcare services for benefit of citizens so every citizen has to take the provision to bear their expenses for the medical bills. In conclusion, even though poverties are accounting for a large proportion in every
nation
, the national population having good conditions ought to take duty for the amount they spent on
health
 and the
nation
 need to provide these providers. I believe that by only doing so, the country will gradually develop and improve citizens'
health
.
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