If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition. What would you choose? Why? use specific reasons and details to explore your choice.

In our modern society, enjoying other cultures is quite popular,
moreover
, more and more
people
are interested in knowing different customs. I would like to choose Kimono if I was asked to elect one traditional thing in my country
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an international exhibition. In
this
essay, two reasons for my choice will be discussed.
First
of all, Kimono is
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made
from
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my country and it can explain our culture and history well.
For example
, a variety of
Japanese
materials are used to make
Kimono
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, which leads to
make
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an
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great opportunity for introducing original
Japanese
resources.
Moreover
, a famous historian named Tanaka in Tokyo university explained that Kimono is the most valuable cloth in Japan.
Thus
,
this
makes it clear that Kimono is the best choice for explaining our original materials and the culture to foreign
people
.
In addition
to that, Kimono are able to make a huge economic effect compared to other things. The price of Kimono is quite high,
for
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we can buy it
at
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least $5000. If many
people
know about Kimono and are sold well, it give
great
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impact on the
Japanese
economic situation. Recent research conducted by the
Japanese
government showed that Kimono is one of the highest traditional goods in our country, 35% of all total income from foreign tourists was occupied
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it.
Therefore
, it has become apparent that Kimono can improve the
Japanese
economic situation drastically. In conclusion, two reasons
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electing Kimono
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discussed in terms of the cultural aspect and the big impact on
economic
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situation. For those two reasons, I would like to choose Kimono
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an international exhibition. After a thorough analysis of
this
subject, it is expected that many
people
try to expand Kimono more for foreign countries in the future.
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