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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of employees in Australia, Switzerland, Iceland,
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, New Zealand and
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 according to their sex in the years 1995 and 2005. Overall, it is clear from the graph, that generally female employees have the lowest rates in all six countries in 1995, while men in 2005 have the highest percentage of employment across the board. One significant feature shown from the bar chart is the ratio of working women rapidly increased from 1995 to 2005. New Zealand has the smallest ratio of workers among women in 1995. It was only 25%, while the male ratio was more than double higher and made 60%.
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 ten years from 45% to 38%. Another key fact is the growth of male employment by at least 10% in all countries. Iceland has the highest men employment in both 1995 and 2005, it was 71% and 83% correspondingly.
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% in both years. The smallest distinction between men and women ratios has
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 when it makes only 5%.
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