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The use of electronic has a negative effect on personal relationships between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that, in today's scenario, technology play's vital role in the individual's
life
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,the utilization of electronic
gadgets
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 has a deleterious effect on personal relationships between the masses. I agree with
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 statement which I will discuss in upcoming paragraphs with relevant examples and conclusions. To commence with,
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, no doubt technology plays a vital role in an individual's
life
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 but it has some negative effect on the
relationship
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 between the masses they do not give
time
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 to their
parents
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 because they give all their
time
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 the use of electronic
gadgets
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 which impact their
relationship
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.
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, in ,Delhi a survey was conducted that showed that 90% of the masses give their
time
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 to the use of electronic
gadgets
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 which has a deleterious impact on their
life
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.
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, do not listen to their
parents
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 and they do not want any interference in their
life
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 because wanted to spend more
time
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 on electronic
gadgets
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.
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 to
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, youngsters do not spend
time
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 with their old
parents
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, they think that the use of technology is a better way to enjoy rather than spending
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 with their
parents
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.
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, electronic
gadgets
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 not only impact their
relationship
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 but
also
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 have a negative effect on their health
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 as sometimes their suffering from mental diseases
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, week of eyesight and many more.
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, most individuals are workaholics and they spend more
time
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 in their office which impacts their
relationship
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 because they do not give any
time
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 to their partner. In conclusion,
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, electronic
gadgets
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 have deleterious effects on the
relationship
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 between people because they do nothing to give any
time
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 to their personal relationships and
also
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 do not want any type of interference in their
life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electronic devices
  • personal relationships
  • communication
  • social skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • isolation
  • emotional connection
  • maintain friendships
  • screen time
  • technology addiction
  • social media
  • virtual communication
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • interpersonal skills
  • disconnect
  • digital world
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