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You are planning a business to another city. You will have some free time to do some sightseeing while you are there. ● Write a letter to a friend who lives in the city you will visit. In your letter ● Explain the purpose of the trip ● Ask about thing to do and see in the city ● Invite your friend to do something with you during your visit

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Dear Maninder, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
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 letter to let you know that I will be visiting
London
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 for a business trip next month. I work for Universal Technologies as a Software Developer. Presently, I am leading a tech team, which handles our European clients and
resolve
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 their complaints about our programs.
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, my manager has assigned me to meet one of our customers in
London
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. I will be on a
week long
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 trip and will be staying in Central
London
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 in a hotel. Probably, I will get free evenings, because most of my work is on screen only. I have heard
my
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good things about the places like
London
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 Eye and Local Monuments in the city.
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, I was wondering which
all
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places should I visit during
this
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 trip
?
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 I would love to have you as my companion during those days
,
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 because it will
gives
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give
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 us an opportunity to spend some quality time together. I would be honoured
,
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 if you could spare some time and show me around your native city. I hope will be happy
hosting
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 me and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.

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task achievement
Consider adding more specific personal touches or anecdotes to make the letter more engaging.
task achievement
The letter clearly explains the purpose of the trip, asks about things to do, and invites the friend to join in. This comprehensiveness achieves a high task response score.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are friendly and appropriate, contributing to good coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, helping to maintain clarity and organization.
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