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Inspite of the advances in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the cases? What can be done about this problem?

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With the development of modern technology, more and more
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 are getting rid of food issues.
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 there are still some
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 in most developing
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 who are facing the trouble of hunger, and there are several reasons cause
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problem
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. I believe that developed
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 and local
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 can take steps to fix
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problem
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 .
People
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 who live in developing
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 ,especially some low incomes
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 are isolated nowadays. These
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 have no ability to develop their technology. The major reason is there are no equipment and funds to support agricultural technology development, and
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 can result in bad influence. One bad result we can see is
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 are using traditional methods to grow grains and crops because they want more food to survive, they may be taking some wrong actions to make soil productive.
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 can be a worse circular all the time. To solve
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, developed
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 can work with local
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 together to improve the situation.
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, developed
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 can invest in local infrastructures for providing more job opportunities.
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 can increase employment.
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, local
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 should make some policies to attract other
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 to come, and develop their tourism to attract tourists from other rich
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 as well.
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, parents should realize the importance of education, and local
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 should make education compulsory for all children.
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, schools can reduce the tuition for studying and
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 can give bonuses to schools which support kids to receive an education. In conclusion, we can have some measures to solve
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 a
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, and I strongly argued that we will see a better situation in the future when more and more
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 will not have
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 issues.

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