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Some people think we should stop buliding libary beacuse it waste of goverment's revenue. What extent do you agree?

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The diagram illustrates the process by/
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which electricity is produced within a hydroelectric power station. It is seen that there are six stages commencing with the
water
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 flow from the river to a high-level
reservoir
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 and ending with the pumped
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 back to the dam after generating electricity. At the outset, the river floods a high-level
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 before the
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 flows through the dam which is set
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 open or close mode at day or night, respectively.
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, the
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 with profound high pressure continues flowing into a power station.
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, power lines are produced with the result that the
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 makes the generator operational.
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, electricity is created before entering into the national grid. Simultaneously, the aforementioned amount of
water
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 flows into a low-level
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 before returning through the generator at night which pumps it back into the high-level
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. Eventually, at that time, the dam is closed so
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 is stored to continue a similar process on the following day.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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