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More people is moving to the big city to live and work. What are the reasons and results of this trend?

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In
this
 day and age, the majority of
people
 prefer to live in large
cities
 because they believe that the city has opportunities to have a better life. In
this
 essay, multiple reasoning to follow with the consequences of the outcome. The
first
 reason is that
cities
 have the convenience of transportation. When living in the city, it is not hard going from place to place as vehicles are easy to find.
Cities
also
 have various places like hospitals, churches, markets, schools and etc. With available access to transport, it will be hassle-free to reach those destinations.
Second
, having social life and entertainment. Due to being crowded with
people
, a person can easily talk to someone and form friendships. The city has
also
 various kinds of entertainment like going to bars and pubs, concerts, gym sports and many more.
Lastly
, having job opportunities, several businesses and investors are more focused on investing in
cities
 than in urban areas.
Furthermore
, they build more establishments that will provide work to those who want to start a life in the metropolitan area.
On the other hand
, because a great number of
people
 moved to
cities
, they became overpopulated.
As a result
, overpopulation may cause a shortage of water and food because the number of
people
 that live in an area has exceeded.
In addition
, it can cause traffic congestion, for many will buy cars for travelling
instead
 of commuting that would take too much time. Being overpopulated will cause water and air pollution, for many
people
 will just throw their garbage everywhere because no space is provided for them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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