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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. Do you agree or disagree?

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Migrating to a foreign region that has a different language may cause social and personal issues which I agree with and going to discuss in the following paragraphs.
People
 who have learned a
second
 language
besides
 their mother tongue words would face many problems in their workplaces. The more individuals are better at communicating among a group of coworkers, the more improvements they will make in their future positions or levels of income.
Otherwise
, deficit-developed conversations restrict employees to express their thoughts.
Also
, prevent one to achieve what they desire or are capable of. In fact, many failures in workplaces could cause
people
 to lose their confidence.
In addition
, a person's efficiency as a team member would decrease significantly.
Therefore
, lower productivity leads to lower income and standards of living.
Furthermore
, in social terms, cultural differences can affect the way
people
 communicate. Sometimes various approaches make misunderstandings due to not only lacking vocabulary knowledge but
also
 acting differently in cultural terms.
On the other hand
, there are several expressions in any verbal culture
that is
 confusing for foreigners.
Hence
,
this
 gap in comprehension in various languages makes
people
 change their behaviour.
For instance
, an extrovert person in his hometown uses a wide range of slang and jokes to express better their ideas.
On the contrary
,
this
 extrovert person could become an introvert by force of foreign social groups due to the lack of verbal knowledge or subtle differences in the culture of communication.
Therefore
, a compensatory switch in social approaches would cause depression in the future. In conclusion, living in a foreign country with a new verbal structure could make workplaces and social lives challenging since deficit vocabulary to fully explain inner ideas.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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