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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic: It will be better to have wide use of driverless cars for individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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There is an expression of someone's opinion that driverless cars should be widely used in society and individuals. I think
that is
 acceptable to me. In general, two reasons which are the majority why I accept that idea. First of all, the traffic disaster and accident recently
make
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 me realise that the human driver is not dependable at all.
Because it
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 is a normal thing for everyone who sits in front of the Television to see plenty of drivers who have already been drunk driving their car and think about what if I
would
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 not
be
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 caught after all.
Besides
, It is generally acknowledged that human beings may forget the
thing
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 that they have known or learnt, which will make the driver forget about the driving skills that they need to know about in driving school so that the skills will be slightly forgotten year by year.
Whereas
 the driverless car can perfectly solve the previous problem.
Firstly
, the technology-driver(written below as
TD
) can solve the problem of the state of drivers' bodies and mental problems. Obviously, the
TD
 does not have any desire for liquor or
asleep
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, so it is impossible when the whole technology is mature to happen some similar problem caused by the drunk driver.
Furthermore
, the
TD
also
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will never forget anything if you download them, so it can
also
 prevent
the
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 decrease of skills of driving happening.
To conclude
 the use of the
TD
 will be beneficial to the safety of the street and lower the probability of a disaster happening, even if it has not been mature nowadays, but after they have been well-developed, it is a really great thing.
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task response
Use more specific and relevant examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
The introduction lacks clarity and structure. Provide a clear introduction and conclusion to your essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Driverless cars
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Human error
  • Traffic congestion
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly
  • Machine learning
  • Artificial Intelligence
  • Adaptive algorithms
  • Unemployment
  • Surveillance
  • Cybersecurity
  • Liability issues
  • Infrastructure
  • Mixed traffic
  • Smart cities
  • Regulatory framework
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