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Ms Georgine Ponsford Resident Community Nurse Community Retirement Home 103 Light Street Newtown 10 February 2019 Dear Ms Ponsford, Re: Lionel
Ramamurthy
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, aged 63
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Lionel
Ramamurthy
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was admitted on 4 February 2019 having contracted pneumonia. He is now ready for discharge back into your care tomorrow. On admission, he was experiencing fevers and rigours. He suffered
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, wheezing and sleeplessness. He had chest and abdominal pain
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prolonged persistent coughing. After a week in the hospital, he has stabilised and his breathing problems are now resolved.
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, he still experiences some chest and abdominal pain, with a dry cough. His nursing management in the hospital
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consisted of a walking frame and assistance with showering and dressing.
Mr
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Ramamurthy
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is now more independent. He is
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shower and use the toilet independently. Paracetamol may be administered as needed if chest and abdominal pain persists and
Mr
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Ramamurthy
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should be kept warm. Please encourage oral fluids, and ensure that he sits up, rather than
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down, whenever possible to ensure postural drainage. He should ambulate regularly, and continue with deep breathing and coughing exercises.
Mr
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Ramamurthy
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was very weak on admission to hospital
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but has gained weight with dietitian input. He will need ongoing monitoring of his diet. If you have any queries, please contact me. Yours sincerely, Charge Nurse
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal freedom
  • financial independence
  • personal growth
  • societal perceptions
  • emotional support
  • social connectivity
  • mental health
  • long-term security
  • compromise
  • flexibility
  • self-esteem
  • isolation
  • stigma
  • hobbies and interests
  • time and energy
  • build a broader network
  • pursuing further education
  • allocate their money
  • career-related decisions
  • liberty
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