Advertising are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development?

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advertisements are more and more popular in everyday life. From my
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perspective
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,
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tendency is totally negative. The
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reason why I believe that matter
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nagtive
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negative
faces is that it
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our time.
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many
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people search on Youtube for watching their necessary information, but a lot
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online wastes their time and with
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it
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distracted
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distract
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their work.
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channels earn money from advertising that
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more chance approach to more viewers than channels have well-knowledge without sponsors.
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act will decrease the
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intellectual
levels of the social. Another reason why I believe
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tendency is detrimental is that many shopping
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acttractive
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attractive
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too much to many clients that stimulate their shopping demand and it
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the old-bad habit in their
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consumption
. They do not have the filter in buying something, just buy what they like and it will
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to the waste-consuming in many
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and more serious is that it will
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effect
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too much to the environment.
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, consumers buy more leather products and that stimulate the factories
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more and date by date it will cause the extinction
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many rare
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as tiger, panther or demand
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plastic products that
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encourage
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manufactors
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manufacturers
making it. In sum, that bad activities will
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dramatically to the environment and
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our planet. To conclude, I opine that advertising common to people life that will bring many detrimental for their life, due to the fact that it passive contribute change our habit and
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cause seriously to the
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environment
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • economic growth
  • provide information
  • awareness
  • job opportunities
  • manipulative
  • misleading
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • invade
  • personal space
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