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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The given diagrams outline the differences
of
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between
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road
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the road
a road
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network
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networks
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to
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apply
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a city
hospital
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hospitals
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 in 2007 and in 2010.
Overall
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, there are some significant changes between
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the year
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year
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years
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 2007 and 2010.
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 as the
bus
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 stops along
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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roads
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 have been removed and
became
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become
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 a new
bus
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station
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stations
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.
Besides
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, the separation of staff and public car park
as well as
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 two additional roundabouts on
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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. To commence with, in order to cope with the increased number of vehicles, there is a newly built public car park located right
next
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 to the site of
city
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the city
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 hospital and the original parking lots have turned into solely for staff use, it remains unchanged in front of the hospital.
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, both of the car parks can be entered from
ring
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the ring
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road
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.
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, to eradicate the traffic issues, two roundabouts have been added at the beginning and
ending
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end
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 of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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.
Furthermore
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, all the
bus
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 stops have been dismantled and a
bus
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 station has
constructed
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been constructed
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 on the west of the map and it is linked between roads and roundabouts.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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