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Violence in society increases when more violence is shown on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?.

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It is true that the type of media programme is crucial in building the behaviour and the attitude of people. Violent content in movies and dramas is one way to promote criminal activities in the community. In my opinion, I believe that censorship must be applied to
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 kinds of television in order to protect individuals from the negative effects of
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 material.
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, it is indubitable that criminals often perceive an idea from films in the crime genre to commit a crime perfectly.
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 a team of writers write scripts for movies in a fancy way; some people not only try to copy these screenplays but
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 become successful in executing them. it is,
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 necessary to limit fancy ness in movies to discourage people from adopting these ideas which will reduce violence.
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, often criminals are portrayed as heroes by the publishing which has a detrimental effect on teenagers. Directors and producers of films show murderers and looters as role models for others.
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, murderers and looters often start to live luxurious life after stealing from banks or corporate companies.
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, it is argued that if media houses show violence, it will increase awareness in society to avoid criminal activities but I am convinced that it is creating negative consequences. In conclusion, the violent behaviour of the community members is rising which needs to be addressed. it is,
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 better to avoid
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 content to remove intolerance from the behaviours of society members.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • media influence
  • desensitization
  • mimic
  • impressionable
  • copycat phenomenon
  • aggression
  • correlational
  • causal link
  • violent crime rates
  • educational role
  • glorification
  • cultural norms
  • social factors
  • community norms
  • regulatory measures
  • broadcasting restrictions
  • content rating systems
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