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Multiple Pie Charts shows that different types of courses which were followed by the students during the year 1984 1994 and 2004

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depicts the difference between types of
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courses which were followed by the students during the
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 1984, 1994 and 2004 the data is calibrated in the percentage. overall, it is crystal clear that the highest preparation in each year was
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. After analysing the given chart, it is evident that in 1984 the proportion of correspondence was 20% after a decade the ratio remain the same .the
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 was followed more in both years of 1984 and 1994 the percentum was 54% and 67% respectively .
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 was preferred less in 1984 the percentage was less than 15% in 1994 the ratio was just above the 10%. Delving deeper into the graph, in 2004 the
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 was followed by the students and the ratio was accounted at 40% The online
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 less choose chosen by the students,
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 was less than 1-5th.
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the percentage of
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 media was 35%.
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