Some people think that man’s relationship with animals has changed throughout ages and their use of them in human life in modern era is totally different from what it is used to be. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought by some that the relationship
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has been altered with the passage of time as well as the usage of
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in human life has dramatically varied in
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modern age. In fact, I completely agree that currently,
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are less preferred to use in people’s life.
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less use by
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of people in
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current age. The main reason I believe that the significant number of
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are discouraged
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for transport.
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that there are several modes of transport in the era. Traditionally,
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used
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for transport
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like
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from one place to another place
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delivery of supply goods on
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a donkey
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and for ancestors the horse
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used. Alternatively, in
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modern
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people can commute within
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minutes of time.
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, a person can travel from one country to another country in
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hours. Another point to consider is that the major allocation of
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is to prepare medicine for humans. To illustrate, dogs had their pancreas remove led directly to
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of insulin to recover
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.
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,
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are protected in
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a zoo
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in
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modern world just for the sake of individual entertainment
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.
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,
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can be saved in an efficient manner. To conclude, I firmly believe that in
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animal
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could be served in numerous ways. Not only does it conserved in form of
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but it
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part of medicine.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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