Some people think that man’s relationship with animals has changed throughout ages and their use of them in human life in modern era is totally different from what it is used to be. What extent do you agree or disagree?
It is thought by some that the relationship
of
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between
animals
of man’s
has been altered with the passage of time as well as the usage of Change the noun form
men
man
animals
in human life has dramatically varied in this
modern age. In fact, I completely agree that currently, animals
are less preferred to use in people’s life. This
essay will prefer will provide notions that the way why animals
less use by majority
of people in Add an article
the majority
a majority
this
current age.
The main reason I believe that the significant number of person
are discouraged Fix the agreement mistake
people
animals
for transport. This
is due to fact
that there are several modes of transport in the era. Traditionally, Add an article
the fact
animals
used
for transport Add a missing verb
are used
purpose
like Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
travel
from one place to another place Wrong verb form
travelling
simultaneously
delivery of supply goods on Correct word choice
and simultaneously
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a donkey
the donkey
donkey
and for ancestors the horse Fix the agreement mistake
donkeys
mostly
used. Alternatively, in Add a missing verb
was mostly
this
modern age
people can commute within Add a comma
,age
few
minutes of time. Correct article usage
a few
Furthermore
, a person can travel from one country to another country in few
hours.
Another point to consider is that the major allocation of Correct article usage
a few
animals
is to prepare medicine for humans. To illustrate, dogs had their pancreas remove led directly to discovery
of insulin to recover Add an article
the discovery
diabetic
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the diabetic
patient
. Fix the agreement mistake
patients
Moreover
, animals
are protected in Add an article
a zoo
the zoo
zoo
in Fix the agreement mistake
zoos
this
modern world just for the sake of individual entertainment purpose
. Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
As a result
, animals
can be saved in an efficient manner.
To conclude, I firmly believe that in this
twenty-one century
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twenty-one-century
animal
could be served in numerous ways. Not only does it conserved in form of Fix the agreement mistake
animals
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the zoo
a zoo
zoo
but it Fix the agreement mistake
zoos
also
part of medicine.Add a missing verb
is also
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite