Some people think that man’s relationship with animals has changed throughout ages and their use of them in human life in modern era is totally different from what it is used to be. What extent do you agree or disagree?

It is thought by some that the relationship
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animals
of
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has been altered with the passage of time as well as the usage of
animals
in human life has dramatically varied in
this
modern age. In fact, I completely agree that currently,
animals
are less preferred to use in people’s life.
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animals
less use by
majority
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the majority
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of people in
this
current age. The main reason I believe that the significant number of
person
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are discouraged
animals
for transport.
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is due to
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that there are several modes of transport in the era. Traditionally,
animals
used
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for transport
purpose
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like
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from one place to another place
simultaneously
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delivery of supply goods on
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a donkey
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donkey
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and for ancestors the horse
mostly
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used. Alternatively, in
this
modern
age
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people can commute within
few
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minutes of time.
Furthermore
, a person can travel from one country to another country in
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hours. Another point to consider is that the major allocation of
animals
is to prepare medicine for humans. To illustrate, dogs had their pancreas remove led directly to
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of insulin to recover
diabetic
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patient
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.
Moreover
,
animals
are protected in
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a zoo
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in
this
modern world just for the sake of individual entertainment
purpose
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.
As a result
,
animals
can be saved in an efficient manner. To conclude, I firmly believe that in
this
twenty-one century
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animal
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could be served in numerous ways. Not only does it conserved in form of
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the zoo
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zoo
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but it
also
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part of medicine.
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