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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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Nowadays, more
people
 are interested in exploring the
history
 of their living places worldwide. The reasons can be concluded as follows:
Firstly
, our society changed a lot since human beings stepped into the
Second
 Industrial Revolution.
However
, the government ignores protecting the historical
buildings
 and the interest of places. More ancient
buildings
 are destroyed as society moves forward. So some experts conduct discussions regarding
this
 phenomenon, and the same conclusion was achieved that ancient architecture is one of the most brilliant treasures of all human beings. After the publication, more
people
 begin to converter their idea and think highly of the historical
buildings
. And the interest in discovering the
history
 behind their related living places.
On the other hand
, cultural diversity contributes to
this
 too. It is common that the development of technology decreases cultural diversity. The private house or villa is taken back from the government and built into the same apartment. The building of a city becomes the same look. Old architecture is a minority nowadays.
As a result
, a group of
people
 who love to discover and protect special and ancient
buildings
 pop up. How research the
history
 of one building becomes a trend. In my opinion,
people
 can count on the Internet,
for example
, we can create a vital discussion group on Facebook, or hold a campaign to communicate the past of their living
buildings
.
Besides
, we can browse more data online to discover
this
 as more EBook is uploaded to the Internet. To sum up, social development and the lack of cultural diversity nowadays are the triggers of
this
. With the support of the Internet,
people
 can easily discover the
history
 behind their living
buildings
.
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