Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The majority of
poloticians
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politicians
think that the most crucial aim of government should be economic
progress
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.
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, some
people
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say that progressing in other subjects is important as well. I agree with the
second
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point of view, and I believe that cultural and scientific
progress
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are two critical for society. There are many reasons that prove economic progression is one of the most important
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of governments.
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, money is one of the basic needs of
people
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that
associated
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with many other things.
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, all individuals need to have healthy food and suitable cloth.
The economic
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growth helps
people
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to provide
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needs and become happy.
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,
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economy can increase the quality of individual's lives and
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provide a condition for other fields.
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, there are several crucial reasons why other aspects of societies like culture and science.
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, scientific
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create new ideas to improve our understanding of the world around
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prevent many problems.
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, medical
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can increase the level of
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's health, and prevent many diseases.
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, cultural progression
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as art, history, and human science is a vital requirement of each society
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because
becasue
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because
these subjects can increase our knowledge of
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human nature.
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can help
people
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to learn from the past and think about their future. In conclusion,
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economic growth is a critical responsibility of each government, other advances are vital. I believe that each nation needs to
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in every
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of life.
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