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advertising is successful at persuading us to buy things/advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discus both view of that.

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Nowadays, Some
people
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 argue commercial information about things
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 as goods and foods succeed attracts
people
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 to buy them. On another side, the
ads
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 are not valuable because
people
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 lack attention. That opinion has several main reasons for how commercial
ads
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 affect both
products
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 and
people
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. The quality of
ads
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 has variations to influence society about something of product. It is the company's strategy for boosting the selling of
products
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.
However
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, when the companies put the commercial break with various eye catch colours on TV or screen will persuade
people
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 to watch it.
Then
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 when the public sees the same ad for periods of time, the brain will record and suggest checking the production.
In addition
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, the advertising on the internet is using an algorithm code for
people
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 looking for something, the suggestion will redirect
people
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 to the brand. In short,
people
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 will be considered to buy things that they search for.
Furthermore
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, the boring advertising and easy idea will not persuade
people
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. Because
people
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 thought that the product was less info and not attractive. Most populations like cheerful and informative
ads
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. So the ad quality is the important thing.
For example
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 when to the same kind of
products
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 one with the aesthetic and the others using the black and white colour are compared. The results will show that the public will choose the
first
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 one over the black and white colour. To sum up, the quality of
ads
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 is considered and support of number on persuading
people
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 to pick the
products
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. Companies should put more attention to the materials, ideas and goals of each of their
products
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. If the companies are aware of it, the product their sell will increase significantly because of the commercial information.

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