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advertising is successful at persuading us to buy things/advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discus both view of that.

#attention #discus
Nowadays, Some
people
 argue commercial information about things
such
 as goods and foods succeed attracts
people
 to buy them. On another side, the
ads
 are not valuable because
people
 lack attention. That opinion has several main reasons for how commercial
ads
 affect both
products
 and
people
. The quality of
ads
 has variations to influence society about something of product. It is the company's strategy for boosting the selling of
products
.
However
, when the companies put the commercial break with various eye catch colours on TV or screen will persuade
people
 to watch it.
Then
 when the public sees the same ad for periods of time, the brain will record and suggest checking the production.
In addition
, the advertising on the internet is using an algorithm code for
people
 looking for something, the suggestion will redirect
people
 to the brand. In short,
people
 will be considered to buy things that they search for.
Furthermore
, the boring advertising and easy idea will not persuade
people
. Because
people
 thought that the product was less info and not attractive. Most populations like cheerful and informative
ads
. So the ad quality is the important thing.
For example
 when to the same kind of
products
 one with the aesthetic and the others using the black and white colour are compared. The results will show that the public will choose the
first
 one over the black and white colour. To sum up, the quality of
ads
 is considered and support of number on persuading
people
 to pick the
products
. Companies should put more attention to the materials, ideas and goals of each of their
products
. If the companies are aware of it, the product their sell will increase significantly because of the commercial information.
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