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Some believe that technology, such as mobile phones, cell phones are destroying social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some folks argue that social communication has decreased due to technological advancements like mobile phones. I agree with the above statement. The main reason for
this
 is the availability of smartphones.
Second
 is the convenience apps available for everything. I will discuss both the issues below.
Technology
 has become so cheap these days that almost everyone can afford smartphones. Due to
this
, all
people
 have access to the apps and engaging
content
 available on the internet. So
instead
 of going out and interacting socially,
people
 prefer to spend their free time browsing through the
content
. Today there are many OTT platforms available that offer entertainment almost free of cost and the
content
 created is
such
 that the user should engage himself and should be immersed in it. Social media has
further
 decreased the need for social interaction. As everyone is available online or is a phone call away we avoid going to their place even if they live a few meters from our home. The
technology
 is so advanced that we can have an
app
 for anything. We have an
app
 for food ordering, house cleaning and many
such
 things. Using
this
app
 we have created a lazy workspace environment for ourselves under a false pretence of convenience.
For example
, when we go grocery shopping in the market we can interact with different kinds of
people
, get to know about new developments in our area and create a bond of friendship with
people
. But as the grocery shopping
app
 is available
people
 give an excuse of being busy and order from the
app
. Doing
this
 cuts an entire cycle of human interaction. In conclusion, I would like to say that due to the accessibility of smartphones, engaging
content
 and apps available for everything we are ignoring the gift of human interaction. The innovations in
technology
 are done for the betterment of humanity but it is being misused by many of us. So we should make ourselves aware of the correct usage of
technology
.
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