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In developing countries, some people believe that governments should give people access to new technology in order to improve their lives, while others think governments should offer free education. Discuss both ideas and give your own opinion.

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In many developing nations, some portion of the community assumes that the government should provide privilege to the latest
technology
 for the upbringing of their lives.
However
, the other portion is in the opinion that the
state
 holders should provide free
education
.
Thus
this
 essay will discuss both sides and provide my views. The society who are in
favor
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 of providing new
technology
 to
people
 views that, many cannot afford it by themselves, and the company that manufactures the new innovative product will charge more for it,
thus
, it is difficult for many
students
 to afford it. If the government can assist them by providing it for free it will help them to competent with rich kids.
for example
, the
state
 authority of Andhra Pradesh, took the
first
 step to provide free laptops to all poverty-driven driven
students
 who are in college. With
this
, move many
students
 went on to settle in their careers and are supporting the
state
 economy.
On the other hand
, some community members believe that free
education
 is better for the development of all
people
. It will help even the ones who have dropped their
education
 due to their family condition or financial problems.
for example
, the Bihar government has announced that it will provide free
education
 to 10 standards for all the
state
students
, because of
this
 many
students
 got the roll back to the schools and many were able to complete primary
education
.
This
 will help
people
 to decide what is good and bad and ultimately it will help society to be in great harmony. In conclusion, I believe that free
education
 is a good option, it not only helps all to be educated but it will help
people
 to avoid being in other unwanted ways of living life.
Although
, free
technology
 for all is good
people
 need to be educated in order to learn
technology
.
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