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Some people say that now we can see films on, phones or tablet there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films, need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these, views and give your own opinion

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An increasing number of
people
 watch
movies
 and entertainment on their mobile phones.
This
 essay will discuss why some
people
 prefer watching content on their personal devices to visiting a movie
theatre
 and why enjoy certain genres of
movies
 namely, action and 3D, and will continue to go to cinemas. Increasing internet speeds and access to smartphones have made it possible for millions around the world to access good quality entertainment at the click of a button. A recent survey of five hundred
people
 in London showed that 70% of them prefer to watch a movie from the comfort of their homes.
Moreover
, theatres follow a rigid plan schedule and that may or may not work with our busy lives. For these reasons, some
people
 believe that there is no longer a need to go to a
theatre
 to watch a movie.
On the other hand
, cinema
that is
 action-packed or required advanced technology to be showcased on a large screen. The experience of watching a thriller or an action-packed sequence with hundreds of other movie-goers in an oversized, dark and Dolby-sound equipped hall is incomparable.
In addition
, some
movies
 are made in technologies
such
 as 3D that can only be enjoyed on specially equipped screens.
Consequently
, watching
such
 content on a big screen is far more rewarding. In conclusion, many
people
 like to watch
movies
 on their smartphones of the convenience it offers.
This
 essay discussed why some
people
 may not want to go to the
theatre
 anymore and why the large-screen format will continue to be popular due to the cinematic experience it provides. In my opinion, despite the growing use of phones and tablets, certain types of films are best enjoyed in a
theatre
.
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