Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree
There is the idea that
music
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people
from diverse Use synonyms
cultures
and ages, and I completely support Use synonyms
this
notion for a range of reasons.
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Music
is very essential for Use synonyms
cultures
around the world because it Use synonyms
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part
of their daily lives. Add a missing verb
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People
across multiple Use synonyms
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use Use synonyms
music
in their various celebrations, Use synonyms
such
as funerals, Linking Words
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and naming
national
and community festivals. Traditional songs are sung among Correct word choice
and national
individuals
from the same Use synonyms
cultures
and they enjoy it much because the lyrics are clear and understandable to them. It is Use synonyms
part
of their identity, and Use synonyms
therefore
do their best not to compose songs that will invoke hatred, tribalism and division. Traditional Linking Words
music
portrays the history of a country and the rich cultural practices that their ancestors have initiated throughout their Use synonyms
live
time. They cherish Replace the word
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this
valuable inheritance and preserve it.
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, how does Change the verb form
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music
gather Use synonyms
people
of different nationalities and ages worldwide? To start with, globalisation has contributed enormously to Use synonyms
this
development. Nowadays Linking Words
individuals
from many countries have learnt Use synonyms
embrace
cultural diversity of which Fix the infinitive
to embrace
music
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part
. Use synonyms
Music
is produced in one nationality and sold globally. Use synonyms
People
want to listen to something different. Use synonyms
This
cultural appreciation has united groups of nations. There is a sense of Linking Words
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when you hear someone Correct your spelling
belongingness
belonging
another
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Music
has the power of promoting peace among Use synonyms
individuals
and nations. Use synonyms
For example
, when there is a war in one Linking Words
part
of the world, musicians worldwide come together irrespective of their political background to compose Use synonyms
music
that can curb the tension. It can unite Use synonyms
people
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also
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such
as the Olympics games where Linking Words
individuals
put aside their wrath and cheer when national anthems from other parts of the world are Use synonyms
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Music
is a powerful tool that helps humanity of all ages to correct their mistakes.
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are connected by Use synonyms
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during
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite