You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant’s manager. In your letter, – explain that you would like to apply for the job – give some details of any relevant experience that you have – specify the days and times that would suit you
Dear Sir/Madame,
I recently saw that you are offering a part-time job for your local restaurant. I want to let you know that I am interested in that position. I am 25 years old, a university student and I really need a part-time job to cover my expenses.
As a relevant experience, I used to work in my summer holidays as a part-time barista in a local bar. The job was good and the money was
also
, but I stopped because of my studies. I am willing to learn the position that you are offering now and do my best. The only problem will be the hours because I can only work between 15:00 and 21:00 on weekly base. For the weekends I can work from 13:00 to 23:00.
So if you are interested, please contact with me via email on [email protected], of by phone on +2456798032 after 15:00 o'cklock.
Thanks in advance.
I am looking forward hearing from you soon.
Yours faithfully
Marakia, KourkoudiSubmitted by mayiou on
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Greeting and Closing
Ensure a proper salutation and sign-off are used, such as 'Dear Manager' or 'Dear [Name], if known, and 'Yours sincerely' if the name is known or 'Yours faithfully' if it is not. 'Sir/Madame' is informal and lacks specificity.
Logical Structure
The logical structure of the letter can be improved by having a clearer introduction, body, and conclusion. Introduce yourself and your intent concisely in the opening paragraph, detail your experience and suitability in the body, and offer availability along with closing remarks in the final paragraph.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Try to maintain a single idea per paragraph for clarity. The current paragraphs are somewhat mixed in focus. You could separate the explanation of your previous experience and the availability into two distinct paragraphs.
Complete Response
It is essential to address all parts of the task. You have not provided enough detail about how your experience is particularly relevant to the restaurant job. Explain how the skills you gained in your previous role would be beneficial to the new position.
Writing Tone
The tone of your letter is appropriately formal, which suits the context of applying for a job. However, take care to maintain this formality consistently throughout the entire letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite