Some people think that children should be punished when they commit a crime. Some others think that their parents should be punished. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, in modern era
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the
crime
are
increasing day by day. Teaching are play important role Correct subject-verb agreement
is
human
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in human
life
. Some children
are starting crime
Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
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at in
in
elder age because their Correct your spelling
an
parents
are not strictly with children
. Some individuals believe that parents
should be punished if children
do any crime
. while,
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apply
other
think that Correct pronoun usage
others
children
should be punished they
commit a Correct word choice
if they
crime
.I will discuss the
both view of points in Remove the article
apply
upcoming
paragraphs.
On the one hand, education are playing important role in Correct article usage
the upcoming
children
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children's
life
. Children
do lot
of activities Change the article
a lot
in
childhood age. They watch numerous violent Change preposition
at
movie
and try to do Fix the agreement mistake
movies
these kind
of Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
activity
. Fix the agreement mistake
activities
Parents
should be aware for
Change preposition
of
children
. Youngsters learning
Wrong verb form
learn
life
skills with their parents
. Moreover
,if their child are
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is
intersting
in Correct your spelling
interesting
crime
they make strictly and
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apply
Correct your spelling
aware
awar
Correct your spelling
aware
about
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of
drawbacks
of Correct article usage
the drawbacks
life
. For instance
,survey
conducted by (BBC) news channel Add an article
a survey
it
showed that japan Correct pronoun usage
apply
children
news Change noun form
children's
there
pupils are more interested in criminal movies because their Replace the word
their
parents
are do
not Change the verb form
do
teaching
of good Wrong verb form
teach
skill
in Fix the agreement mistake
skills
life
.The government started new rules of
Change preposition
for
older
generation if their Correct article usage
the older
children
will be relate
any kind of Change the verb form
relate
crime
the whole family are
punished.Wrong verb form
be
For example
,the nation
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nation's
crime
rate are
50%decrease in two decades Change the verb form
is
for
these rules.
On the other Han, Change preposition
of
children
are punished
for Change the verb form
have punished
there
Correct your spelling
their
crime
because their Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
parents
are dont
know about Correct your spelling
don't
life
. Children
are do
not take seriously Change the verb form
do
for
Change preposition
apply
parents
what
sayCorrect pronoun usage
who
that
. The Correct pronoun usage
apply
parents
are not responsible for crime
because they live in order age. Government should be Add an article
the crime
pusniment
only Correct your spelling
punishment
who
are responsible for Correct pronoun usage
those who
crime
. Add an article
the crime
a crime
For example
, (AJJ TAK) news channel it
showed that Correct pronoun usage
apply
children
are living with criminal
Fix the agreement mistake
criminals
for
society and Change preposition
in
parents
leave there
house.
In my opinion, Correct your spelling
their
government
should be Add an article
the government
pusniment
for Correct your spelling
punishment
children
because parents
are dont
know Correct your spelling
don't
for
Change preposition
about
children
Change noun form
children's
life
. Because they have own life
they live life
with own stlye
and Correct your spelling
style
parents
are not responsible for that.Submitted by kawankaur on
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