A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years, or two pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter describe the benefits of sponsoring the sport team. Summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts. And say how you think the company should spend the money.

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Dear Mam or Sir, I'm writing
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letter about the news that you are planning some events in our community. I'm very glad that you are willing to accept the feedback activities you are planning for. I'm thankful to express my opinion regarding selecting the upcoming events you are planning.
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, you are spending a vast of money on an event. On the one hand, many children in our community need a facility and money to develop their skills in sports to keep them away from bad vices. Building good facilities and providing them with a good uniform need a large number of funds.
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, the money you will help them excel in sports. On the other hand, Conducting an open free concert will help them relax and experience what rich people attend an expensive celebrity concert. Some of the young individuals will inspire to develop their talent to become an artist. In my opinion, the events that your company are planning can have good benefits, but 2 years of sports sponsorship can help better ,especially for a young individual. It has a long-term benefit for their health and lessens the burden of the parents to keep them away from bad habits. Faithfully yours, Charles Prada
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