Some people believe that factories and private tour operators should bear the cost of cleaning up environmental pollution, instead of the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

The reading
passage
explains three possible reasons why young
salmon
jump despite the energy required.
However
, the professor in the lecture argues that the three theories written about in the
passage
is
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unconvincing.
First
, the reading
passage
states that flying insects are
also
the
pray
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prey
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of young
salmon
in addition
to zooplankton, and the
salmon
jump to eat the flying insects.
On the other hand
, the professor says that the sockeye
salmon
, a type of
salmon
, jumps,
although
it does not eat flying insects at all.
This
contradicts what the
passage
indicates.
Second
, the reading mentions that
jumping
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of young
salmon
is required in order to flee from predators.
In contrast
, the lecture says that if young
salmon
jump, they become more visible to their predators
such
as birds or polar bears, which does not benefit young salmons.
In addition
, it is known that young
salmon
move in a group and when a predator
appear
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, they scatter away in different directions.
This
is an alternative strategy not considered by the author of the reading
passage
.
Third
, the
passage
says that jumping helps young
salmon
remove sea lice sticking to their body. Yet, in the lecture, jumping 50 times removes just one sea louse, and the strategy is simply too ineffective considering the energy of jumping
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since young
salmon
require huge amounts of energy to get stronger.
This
is another part that contradicts what the reading indicates.
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