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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 modern era, everyone is available online. In the upcoming days, People can read
news
, articles and general by using the
internet
.
Thus
 no one will pay extra for newspapers and books. I largely agree with
this
 statement. In
this
 essay, I shall explain why I am in agreement largely with the above statement along with appropriate examples.
To begin
 with, in
this
 global era technology grows day by day.
Therefore
, individuals use the
internet
 to search for what they want.
First
 of all, in the future
newspaper
 and books will hide behind technology.
For example
, people will use the
internet
 to read updated
news
 at any
time
, anywhere.
As a result
, they will save
time
 as well as money.
Moreover
, newspapers carry limited
news
 but one can search for
news
 across the world by using various websites or new portals. Even press reporters publish
news
 on the
internet
 and others can read it immediately.
In contrast
, it takes
time
 to print new on paper and they deliver.
Furthermore
,
internet
 amenities will help to save trees.
Hence
, it reduces the process of printing on paper.
On the other hand
, elders mostly prefer to read a
newspaper
 in the morning with a cup of tea.
Although
, they do have not enough knowledge to operate the
internet
.
Thus
 they will give more preference to newspapers and books to read.
For instance
, they are habitual with printing new as they were following
this
 from childhood. In conclusion, 90% of the population does the job and they have no
time
 to read a
newspaper
 by sitting in a chair. Even by using the
internet
Add a comma
,internet
show examples
 they can read updated
news
 and article while travelling. Rest 10% are those who are not familiar with the
internet
 is why they will choose
newspaper
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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