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Weddings are getting bigger and more expensive. What is the reason for this? Is it positive or negative development?

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Wedding nowadays requires more costs than it did in the past. It is probably caused by an increase in the standard and its special fee. For these reasons, I think it causes adverse consequences, which are the cases where people cannot afford the fees.
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 with, the development of the economy can provide affluence to middle-class families.
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 explains that the wedding industry can charge more fees for the ceremony compared to the past.
In other words
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, the effects of inflation throughout the past resulted in an increase in the price of weddings.
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, the wedding is the only special occasion in modern life.
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 means that all marrying families desire to successfully conduct their ceremony, leading to paying for the details.
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, a music band, a host, invitation cards and so on are the details that require increasing pay. These reasons can affect the expenditure on weddings.
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, I think that a more expensive marriage can have a negative impact, which is that some individuals cannot have
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 beautiful wedding ceremonies. For those who are not able to save their income to survive, the wedding is not a wise option, and even it can seem waste of money. From
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 point of view, I feel sorry that they cannot leave precious and valuable memories with their loved ones and close friends by celebrating their happy moments. In fact, since it is too costly, many marrying families decide to have a small wedding without any materials.
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,
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 unpayable price of marriage does not enable them to enjoy and experience
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 unique moments. In conclusion, it is reasonable that the price has gone up due to the effects of inflation and extra expense for details to perfectly complete the service.
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, I think
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 causes people hardly afford the wedding ceremony, so it has an adverse impact.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lavish
  • extravagant
  • nuptials
  • matrimony
  • social status
  • opulence
  • milestone
  • financial leverage
  • debt
  • peer pressure
  • consumerism
  • showcase event
  • ceremonial splendor
  • bridal extravaganza
  • market forces
  • commercialization
  • budgeting
  • social comparison
  • destinal wedding
  • event planning
  • wedding vendors
  • loan
  • prestige
  • economic impact
  • mandatory spending
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