The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2006 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2006 and the present day.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates apply the change in the infrastructure of the
University
campus
between 2006 and the present day. First of all, the
university
offices located on the north of the
campus
are altered by the science building for the purpose of science activities.
Besides
that,
student
accommodation, which is
next
to the
university
offices, is broadened with the
second
block.
Secondly
, after 16 years, the teaching block is changed into an art building to serve for arts. Simultaneously, the shops and restaurants are modified by
another
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student
accommodation
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accommodations
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.
In addition
, these figures are incorporated into the
student
facilities- shops offices and put to change for the old
student
accommodation at the corner in 2006.
Although
in the past, the lawn & seating area was the place for students to take a break,
this
factor is eliminated and the
university
campus
just has the lake in the middle.
Overall
, there are many changes in the building of the
campus
. Most of the old building is rebuilt with modern infrastructures and the scale of these building are broadened with many higher towers.
Besides
that, in 2016, the lawn and seating area, which is located in the centre of
campus
, is evicted for other purposes.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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