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Everyone of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do yo agree or disagree?

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The vegan
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 has become the trend in recent days. A lot of people are considering turning vegetarian as they think it's a healthier
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 to have. In
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 in the
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 is important and better than having a vegetarian
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. The herbivorous
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 is thought to be healthier as it's light on the stomach, provides a good amount of fibre and is easily digested. The consumption of
meat
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 according to people forms a bulkier meal as it might require more time to get digested. A lot of individuals feel the non-vegetarian
diet
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 can lead to serious health problems like increased cholesterol, gout, constipation and cardiac issues. A lot of studies on heart diseases suggest higher consumption of fried items of
meat
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 which is hazardous to health. Though most vegetarians opt for it in view of being healthy, in countries like India where almost half the population is vegetarian, is due to religious beliefs. A balanced
diet
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 includes all the macronutrients like carbohydrates, fats and proteins, and
meat
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 forms a good proportion of proteins. The non-vegetarian
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 provides vitamin B12 which is deficient in people who avoid
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diet
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 and can lead to anaemia. The sports persons and the fitness freaks always include protein-rich food items in their
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 so that they can go for strenuous physical activity and maintain their body with muscle mass. As almost everyone ne these days
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 turning towards a healthy lifestyle including their food habits and physical activity, they prefer including all the macro and micronutrients in the
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,
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 including mutton, beef, chicken and seafood. We discussed how a non-vegetarian
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 is healthier than a plant-based
diet
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. To have a healthy and balanced lifestyle one should choose to opt for a
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 including
meat
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 which provides good nutrition and
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 helps in maintaining the body in a good shape.
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