Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience

Elders
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hold the
believe
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of
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resting after
the
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retirement. In my opinion,
work
is so important to keep active
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because
becasue
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because
after getting older more
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expanses
expances
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expenses
appear due to
the
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health problems.
This
essay will demonstrate the reasons behind
this
and my opinion.
To begin
with,
Humans
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nature when they get old, their body
become
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more needy
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for
care
and cure.
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, there are many health problems
appear
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and in our
clucture
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culture
parents
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they have to
care
about their kids till they become adult and
this
is exactly what makes retired workers keep at job
although
they need to get more rest.
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High school teacher
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was over 70 years old, but he wrote an application for the minister that he wish to keep at the job.
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,
what
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can be said
that
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parents they have a kind heart always no matter what age.
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, psychologically when
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an employee
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employee
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employees
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take
use
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to
work
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working
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for many years, it will be very hard to stop working
sudden
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. To illustrate to have a useful habit like
work
, it will not be easy to lose it. A prime example is, my grandfather it took him more than 5 years to accept sitting at home and not
move
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anywhere.
Therefore
, not only do elders prefer to
work
but
also
they prefer to give relatives
care
. in conclusion, After
this
essay has shown the causes and the different opinions, I would like to say that
work
is
important
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daily routine for many people but they have to
care
about their health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retirement age
  • pension systems
  • financial security
  • physical and mental health
  • youth unemployment
  • job opportunities
  • fresh perspectives
  • hobbies and interests
  • passionate workers
  • flexible retirement options
  • social security
  • recuperate
  • decades of hard work
  • contribute skills and experience
  • financial difficulties
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