Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience
Elders
they
hold the Correct pronoun usage
apply
believe
Replace the word
belief
of
resting after Change preposition
in
the
retirement. In my opinion, Correct article usage
apply
work
is so important to keep active Correct your spelling
because
becasue
after getting older more Correct your spelling
because
Correct your spelling
expanses
expances
appear due to Correct your spelling
expenses
the
health problems. Correct article usage
apply
This
essay will demonstrate the reasons behind this
and my opinion.
To begin
with, Humans
nature when they get old, their body Change noun form
Human's
Humans'
become
Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
more needy
for Replace the words
needier
care
and cure. In other words
, there are many health problems appear
and in our Correct pronoun usage
that appear
clucture
Correct your spelling
culture
parents
they have to Add a comma
,parents
care
about their kids till they become adult and this
is exactly what makes retired workers keep at job although
they need to get more rest. For example
High school teacher he
was over 70 years old, but he wrote an application for the minister that he wish to keep at the job. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Hence
, what
can be said Correct pronoun usage
it
that
parents they have a kind heart always no matter what age.
Add a missing verb
is that
Moreover
, psychologically when Correct article usage
an employee
employee
take Fix the agreement mistake
employees
use
to Wrong verb form
used
work
for many years, it will be very hard to stop working Wrong verb form
working
sudden
. To illustrate to have a useful habit like Replace the word
suddenly
work
, it will not be easy to lose it. A prime example is, my grandfather it took him more than 5 years to accept sitting at home and not move
anywhere. Wrong verb form
moving
Therefore
, not only do elders prefer to work
but also
they prefer to give relatives care
.
in conclusion, After this
essay has shown the causes and the different opinions, I would like to say that work
is important
daily routine for many people but they have to Add an article
an important
care
about their health.Submitted by pavictoria06 on
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