You live in a small university town. Last week, you drove to a big city about two hours away to buy a new laptop at a good price. You worked on the laptop all week and finished writing a long assignment that is due shortly. However, this week, the laptop doesn't even switch on. Write to store.In your letter: •Tell the store where you live and what happened •Explain the problem with the laptop •State what action you would like the store to take
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Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing my complaint about the
laptop
I received last
week.This
laptop
has been running for about a week and I have finished my However
, suddenly it broke down and didn't
even light up.
I live in a small university town.I live far from your store, but I went to buy it. Because of
,many people praised your store. Unfortunately, Correct pronoun usage
of this
this
laptop
stopped working. I was very surprised. However
, I used it for 1 week and even finished my work.
I don't
even understand what's wrong with this
Suddenly, this
laptop
turned of
, I tried a lot but it Replace the word
off
doesn'
Wrong verb form
didn't
t
turn on.
I want to say that your store isn't
as good as it sounds. Please, buy the laptop
Then
, sell it to other
.I would be grateful if you could give me a Correct pronoun usage
others
a
full refund.
I look forward to receiving a full refund.
Sincerely,
KamolaRemove the redundancy
apply
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task achievement
Consider providing a more detailed description of the problem with the laptop for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea to improve readability.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and polite.
task achievement
The letter covers all the necessary points requested by the prompt.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite