Some people say that adverting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, advertising is considered
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an integral part of marketing so
that
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companies allocate a sizeable amount of money
on
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to
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producing effective
advertisements
. Some
people
argue that adverting is
such
an ordinary means that
people
do not care about it. While
,
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I personally believe that it is a powerful tool in convincing
people
to buy certain products. In
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both viewpoints will be discussed. On the one
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many commentators claim that persuading individuals
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ads
is not an effective way to
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customers.
Firstly
,
people
find
advertisements
really boring due to the fact that it is broadcasted frequently.
Consequently
,
people
are more likely to change the television channel when
ads
begin.
Secondly
, most
people
have a negative attitude to advertising because they think advertisers want to promote their sales without considering
consumer’s
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real needs. From their standpoints, they intend to mislead them
by
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catchy slogans and flashy products so as to
fulfill
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producers’ goals.
On the other hand
, there are those, myself included, who subscribe to the view that advertising is a strong instrument in
marketing
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world. They maintain that
advertisements
help
people
have
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choice
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as they provide useful information. It means that
people
can choose their
desire
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products or services by watching different
ads
and comparing them.
Furthermore
, adverting
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markets more competitive.
As a result
, prices will decrease and customers may gain a lot of profit
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this
way. In conclusion,
although
some
people
try to get away from
advertisements
in order to make their own decision without any external
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interfere
, I personally believe that
ads
are an efficient means by which
people
can find their potential needs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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