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Some people think they have right to use as much freshwater as they want. Others believe governments should tightly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and your opinion.

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Nowadays it’s true that many places are still facing
the
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 shortage of cleaning
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, especially in some areas which are originally lack of fresh
water
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 and cannot
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 afford the high price from other countries. But I still do not agree with authorities
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 strict
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 for that and other factors
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 modification are vital to make individuals realize the
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 shortage in the entire world. On the one hand.
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 Government makes strict
policies
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 in order to make
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 source
use
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 more effective, indeed, it will pay off in a brief period.
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,
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 does not involve a change in conduct and thought
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for
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people
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. when the thought process is augmented by an educational approach.
People
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 start refusing to
wasting
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water
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 with enthusiasm.
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 in India, authorities increase the gasoline price to reduce the air pollution from traffic. But as time
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 by, the appearance of low-quality petrol harmed the vehicle and
environment
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.
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,
this
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 method is not the best way to solve
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 problem and it is not sustainable.
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, if
government
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the government
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 will totally not make any
policies
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 for
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using
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, it will cause many
people
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use
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water
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 casually and
many
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waste
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wastes
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 will happen. If we
use
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 too much fresh
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, there will be not enough
water
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 for our offspring. And overusing will
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 result in pollution.
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, it cannot be adopted either. In the conclusion. In my
views
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view
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, we should greatly promote
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 conservation and change
people
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's
mindset
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mindsets
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. Even
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policies
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though policies
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 will make an impact on
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 source problems,
it
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 will not be sustainable without attitude therapy and education approaches. At the same time, Proper control of
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use
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 is
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 the right way to go for long-term development rather than without controlling.
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