The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.

The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.
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The pie charts compare the five modes of transportation people used to travel to university for
work
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or study in 2004 and 2009. It is clear from the pie chart that
bus
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and
car
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were the most common way to commute in 2004 and 2009. In 2004, the proportion of going to
work
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by
car
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was over half of the total means of transportation,
while
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it experienced a sharp decline from 51% to only 28% after 5 years, becoming the
second
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-largest. The
bus
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showed a different pattern, the figure for the
bus
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used to be the
second
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most important way to
work
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, become more important and exceeded the figure for the
car
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, from only 33% in 2004 to 46% in 2009.
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, the percentage of riding bicycles to
work
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showed an upward trend, reaching 16% in 2009. And the means of train and walking have slightly fluctuated between 3% to 6% during
this
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period. In conclusion,the means of commuting by
car
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and
bus
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constituted the largest part of transportation over the period.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words work, bus, car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • means of transport
  • commuting patterns
  • sustainable travel
  • urban congestion
  • public transportation
  • private vehicles
  • carpooling
  • urban infrastructure
  • environmental impact
  • modal shift
  • cyclists
  • pedestrians
  • traffic volume
  • ride-sharing
  • policy initiatives
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