The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.
The pie charts compare the five modes of transportation people used to travel to university for
work
or study in 2004 and 2009.
It is clear from the pie chart that bus
and car
were the most common way to commute in 2004 and 2009. In 2004, the proportion of going to work
by car
was over half of the total means of transportation, while
it experienced a sharp decline from 51% to only 28% after 5 years, becoming the second
-largest. The bus
showed a different pattern, the figure for the bus
used to be the second
most important way to work
, become more important and exceeded the figure for the car
, from only 33% in 2004 to 46% in 2009.
Similarly
, the percentage of riding bicycles to work
showed an upward trend, reaching 16% in 2009. And the means of train and walking have slightly fluctuated between 3% to 6% during this
period.
In conclusion,the means of commuting by car
and bus
constituted the largest part of transportation over the period.Submitted by testuya1116 on
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