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Nowadays, overeating has become a serious problem for the wealthy nations, a problem which is even greater than hunger to others. Why is this happening? What can be the solution?

#nations #hunger
Dear
neighbors
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, My name is Lucas Ferryros. I live
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 to your department. I am writing in
regards
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 to the letter that you sent me some days ago. The noises that are being
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heard
heared
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 are made by many new situations that
just
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arrive
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 in my life.
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, I recently bought some dogs. The pet shop said me that to
take
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 care of them was going to be easy and that
them
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 were quiet, but,
how
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 you already know, They are not
such
 that. If I had
know
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 that It was going to happen, I would have not bought them, but something
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easier
easyer
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easier
such
a
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cat. I am really sorry for the problem. I have understood that you
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both
bouth
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both
 work
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form
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 home, so I realise the size of the problem for you. I have been searching for a solution,
nevertheless
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 there is not any, but give them into adoption.
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,
that is
 going to happen.
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Your
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 sincerely Lucas Ferreyros
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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